Triveni is a unique style of poetry writing. It was introduced first around 1972-73, but has enjoyed lot more popular success since the beginning of the new millenium. This form of poetry was introduced and made popular by Gulzar saab. Is is a beautiful modification of traditional Shayaree of Urdu poetry. In a traditional Shayari there are two lines in one Stanza which is known as a sher.
In Triveni, Gulzar adds a third line to a normal stanza. The beauty of it is, that first two lines in themselves are expression of a complete image, but when you read the third one, a whole new dimension is added to the original one.
Word Triveni comes from Triveni Sangam, the famous confluence of three rivers Ganga, Jamuna and invisible Saraswati at Allahabad, India. Ganga and Jamuna are visible but Saraswati is a mythological river and is supposed to be flowing underground. Similarly in Gulzar’s Triveni, the first two lines depict a situation or an image but the third line, in a way unearths the undercurrent truth and the entire situation gets a new meaning.
This is my newly found interset in this New Year. Somehow got very attracted to this style of writing. I have tried to write few on my own as a tribute to Gulzar saab. I hope you guys would appreciate my effort and encourage me to explore more on this mystical journey....
- Pyaar ki umar hoti hai lambi
Aisa suna kiye the hum…
Lekin yeh maloom na tha ki usmein marz bhi hotey hain !!
- Tere intezaar mein hum..
Raith se pathar ban gaye……..
Pehle muthi mein aane se darte the aur ab taraste hain !!
- Unki ankhon se gire jo moti…
Humne apne daman mein samet liye…
Par vo dhaga na ban paaye jo unhe piron saken !!
- Dil mein koi dard dabaye baithe hain
Ashkon ko hasi mein chhupaye baithe hain
Fir kaun kehta hai mare hue ko ehsaas nahin hota !!
- Ek nazar chand humen bhi dekhle, is arzoo mein jee rahe hain..
Fir khud ko fanaah kar ke, auron ki khwahish puri karenge…
Hum vahi hain jinhe dekh log kehte hain, “dekho toot ta taara” !!
terrific lines !! i am a big fan of gulzar saab myself and this post of yours is a wonderful tribute to the maestro!!!!
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"Tere intezaar mein hum..
Raith se pathar ban gaye……..
Pehle muthi mein aane se darte the aur ab taraste hain !!"
this is something truly brilliant piece of poetry !!
Oye! ... awesome poetry ... u are like Gulzaari Sahiba or something (okay, i know that sounds lame.. but still!) :P
ReplyDeleteGood stuff, kid. You sound like an original!
Cheers. keep it coming :)
Dekha "Koi baat chale" was soo apt :)..
ReplyDeletePoetry at its Pristine best..am sure u will canvass this too soon :)..
Expecting more of this stuff..keep exploring till then..:))
कह दो फिर ऊन दीवानों से,
ReplyDeleteजो इनकी आँखों पे मरता है,
विश्वास भरी इन नज़रों से, वो उनकी राह ही तख्ता है!
:D A tribute to the living legend, Karish-Ma... ;)
Wonderful dear...cheers!
Hi Karishma. Very good trivenies and 'Ret' one made me speechless..Amazing..Best of luck..You should explore the world of triveni further..I have also written a couple of them..We share it on Social networking forum(Orkut->Communities-> Gulzar-> Triveni Forum)..You would appreciate many poeple trying to contribute in this wonderful form of poetry..best Wishes...Kamlesh Wadhwani
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ReplyDeletePahle Muthi mein aane se darte the...ab tarastee hein......Hhaayyyyyyyyyyyyy.....ittnaa sundr likha hei tumne ye...Mitthee tumhein aur bhe likhna chahiye yaar...hrr tarah ka hunnar tum apne mein sammate huye baithee hho...jraa bahar nikalein tto hm ssb bhe deedar kr lein...Its just beautiful yaar...and its so original as i know MsK from deep with in...please aur likho...please...my to tte taare
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